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Gast
2004-12-19, 09:33:01
HI,
stimmt der untenstehende Text? (Grammatik, Vok.)

Technology

I think it is very nice that the humans have developed a lot of technical things. The technology make things easier, faster and very much comfortable. With technical help people can do what they want. They can travel over a sea, walk at the moon and communicate over satelitte. In the future the technology gets always better. The life on earth is since in the 21th century not possible without technology.

And there are a lot of more positive things thanks technology. People can take their car to work in a country who is many kilometres far from their home. People can fly with a plane from Berlin to New York in a few hours. People can communicate and read informations over internet. People can phone other people when they are in trouble. People can research the nature and a lot of more interesting things. People can build houses which are safe against earthquakes. People can say how the weather will be in the next days. People are longer healthy because they have medicine and so they can something do against illness.

But there are a lot of negative things, too. People abuse technology to build terrible weapons and to make wars. People destroy with their technology the environment. People consume the raw material on earth and they destroy sea life if an oil tanker sailing. People are dependent on technology. If they haven´t electricity they are helpless.

I think that technology has more positve as negative aspects. Positive are the possibilitis that technology has. It gives a lot of advantages with technology. But it gives big disadvantages when the technology has errors.

Stupor McMundi
2004-12-19, 09:54:18
HI,
stimmt der untenstehende Text? (Grammatik, Vok.)

Technology

I think it is very nice that the humans have developed a lot of technical things. The technology make things easier, faster and very much comfortable. With technical help people can do what they want. They can travel over a sea, walk at the moon and communicate over satelitte. In the future the technology gets always better. The life on earth is since in the 21th century not possible without technology.

And there are a lot of more positive things thanks technology. People can take their car to work in a country who is many kilometres far from their home. People can fly with a plane from Berlin to New York in a few hours. People can communicate and read informations over internet. People can phone other people when they are in trouble. People can research the nature and a lot of more interesting things. People can build houses which are safe against earthquakes. People can say how the weather will be in the next days. People are longer healthy because they have medicine and so they can something do against illness.

But there are a lot of negative things, too. People abuse technology to build terrible weapons and to make wars. People destroy with their technology the environment. People consume the raw material on earth and they destroy sea life if an oil tanker sailing. People are dependent on technology. If they haven´t electricity they are helpless.

I think that technology has more positve as negative aspects. Positive are the possibilitis that technology has. It gives a lot of advantages with technology. But it gives big disadvantages when the technology has errors.


UIUIUIUI
da sollte man noch mal "rüber gehen", ich muss jetzt sporteln, aber später...

Plutos
2004-12-19, 10:11:48
Hui, also da sind doch etliche grobe Fehler drin...und "sprachlich gewandt" ist auch was anderes.
Ich hab mal alles, was überflüssig oder falsch ist, in runde Klammern () gesetzt, die Korrekturen in eckige []. Ich habe mich bemüht, die Formulierungen und den Sinn nicht zu ändern; trotzdem wird daraus kein "gutes" Englisch :frown: . Evtl. sind auch noch ein paar Fehler drin, wo ich mir nicht sicher war.



Technology

I think it is very nice that (the) humans have developed a lot of technical things. The technology make[s] things easier, faster and (very) much [more] comfortable. With technical help people can do what they want. They can travel over (a) sea, walk (at) [on] the moon and communicate over satel[l]i(t)te. In the future (the) technology (gets) always [improves] (better). (The) [L](l)ife on earth is since in the 21th century (not) [im]possible without technology.

And there are a lot (of) more positive things thanks [to?] technology. People can take their car to work in a country (who) [that/which] is many kilometres (far) [away] from their home. People can fly (with a plane(eigentlich unnötig)) from Berlin to New York in a few hours. People can communicate and (read) [gather] information(s) over [the] internet. People can (phone) [call] other people when they are in trouble. People can (research the) [explore] nature and a lot of more interesting things. People can build houses which are safe against earthquakes. People can (say) [predict] how the weather will be in the next days. People are longer healthy because they have medicine and so they can [do] something (do) against illness.

But there are a lot of negative things, too. People abuse technology to build terrible weapons and to make wars. People destroy (with their technology) the environment [with their technology]. People consume (the raw material) [resources] on earth and they destroy sea life if an oil tanker (sailing?) [sinks/breaks into pieces]. People are dependent on technology. If they have(n´t) [no] electricity they are helpless.

I think that technology has more posit[i]ve (as) [than] negative aspects. (Positive are the possibilitis that technology has) [The possibilities that technology gives us are positive]. (It gives) [There are] a lot of advantages with technology. But (it gives) [there are] big disadvantages when (the) technology has errors.

Sergej
2004-12-19, 10:19:51
Technology

I think it's very useful that humans have developed a lot of technical things. The technology makes things easier, faster and much more comfortable. With technical help people can do what they want. They can travel across the seas, fly to the moon and communicate via satelitte. In the future the technology will still improve. Life on earth since the 21th century isn't possible without technology.

And there are a lot more positive things we owe to technology. People can take their cars for driving to their workplace which is many kilometres far away from their home, they can fly by plane from Berlin to New York in just a few hours and communicate via internet. People can phone other people when they are in trouble and they can research the nature. They can build houses which are safe against earthquakes. People can say how the weather will be in the next days and they stay healthier and live longer because of the medicines they have developed.

But there are a lot of negative things, too. People abuse technology to construct terrible weapons used for wars. People destroy the environment with their technology. They consume all the raw material existing on earth and they destroy sea life every time a supertanker founders. People are dependent on technology, without electricity they're helpless.

I think that technology has more positve than negative aspects. Positive aspects are the possibilities that technology offers. There are a lot of advantages in technology, but also major disadvantages if technology fails.

Ist nur ein wenig verändert, aber sollte zumindest etwas richtiger sein als zuvor ;)

Gast
2004-12-19, 10:28:47
Erstmal danke für die Hilfe. So viel Falsch? Wow...dann bin ich ja froh hier gepostet zu haben. Hab jetzt mal eure verbesserungsvorschläge zusammengesetzt (in ein Englisch, dass mir mein Lehrer hoffentlich abnimmt :-))


I think it is very nice that humans have developed a lot of technical things. The technology makes things easier, faster and much more comfortable. With technical help people can do what they want. They can travel across the seas, fly to the moon and communicate via satellite. In the future technology always improves. Life on earth is since in the 21th century impossible without technology.

And there are a lot more positive things thanks to technology. People can take their car to work in a country which is many kilometres far away from their home. People can fly from Berlin to New York in a few hours. People can communicate and gather information over the internet. People can call other people when they are in trouble. People can explore nature and a lot of more interesting things. People can build houses which are safe against earthquakes. People can predict how the weather will be in the next days. People are longer healthy because they have medicine and so they can do something against illness.

But there are a lot of negative things, too. People abuse technology to build terrible weapons and to make wars. People destroy the environment with their technology. People consume all the resources existing on earth on earth and they destroy sea life if an oil tanker sinks. People are dependent on technology. If they have no electricity they are helpless.

I think that technology has more positive than negative aspects. The possibilities that technology gives us are positive. There are a lot of advantages with technology. But there are big disadvantages when technology has errors.

Muselbert
2004-12-19, 10:28:57
And there are a lot (of) more positive things thanks [to?] technology.
Das "to" sollte da rein (du warst dir da ja wohl nicht sicher...)

Plutos
2004-12-19, 21:48:01
Das "to" sollte da rein (du warst dir da ja wohl nicht sicher...)

Ja, genau, Danke. Mein Englisch beschränkt sich zur Zeit doch mehr auf Lesen (Fachliteratur gibts halt fast nur in Englisch), dafür reichts aber völlig.

anderergast
2004-12-19, 22:10:29
Technology

I think it's very useful that humans have developed a lot of technical things. The technology makes things easier, faster and much more comfortable. With technical help people can do what they want. They can travel across the seas, fly to the moon and communicate via satelitte. In the future the technology will still improve. Life on earth since the 21th century isn't possible without technology.

And there are a lot more positive things we owe to technology. People can take their cars for driving to their workplace which is many kilometres far away from their home, they can fly by plane from Berlin to New York in just a few hours and communicate via internet. People can phone other people when they are in trouble and they can research the nature. They can build houses which are safe against earthquakes. People can say how the weather will be in the next days and they stay healthier and live longer because of the medicines they have developed.

But there are a lot of negative things, too. People abuse technology to construct terrible weapons used for wars. People destroy the environment with their technology. They consume all the raw material existing on earth and they destroy sea life every time a supertanker founders. People are dependent on technology, without electricity they're helpless.

I think that technology has more positve than negative aspects. Positive aspects are the possibilities that technology offers. There are a lot of advantages in technology, but also major disadvantages if technology fails.

Ist nur ein wenig verändert, aber sollte zumindest etwas richtiger sein als zuvor ;)

Sehr nice :D