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Ladyzhave
2006-01-22, 20:36:10
könntet ihr das nochmal durchgucken?
hab es mir eben nochmal durchgelesen und keine Fehler gefunden...

hier der Text:


Martin Luther King



• since 1950 there was a movement against the oppression of discriminated people
• King’s engagement for the blacks began when he wanted to marry a white women
• But in 30 of the 48 states of the USA marriages of blacks and whites where forbidden

• Martin Luther King was influenced by Mahatma Gandhis nonviolent protests
and decided to put in for the rights of blacks
• 1954 schools got rid of race seperation

• fight for equal rights went on:
• 1955 “Rosa Parks” refused to leave her seat in a bus for a white person
• King and other people of the civil right movement induced the “Montogomery Bus Boycott” which went on for a whole year ; others moved from city to city to
demonstrate against the race seperation
• Youths striked with “Sit-Ins” in schools
• March on Washington with 250.000 blacks symbolized the civil rigths movement
Here he held his famous “I have a dream speech”
• March from Selma to Montgomery (“The bloody Sunday”) finally made it possible that everyone could vote



Biographie:
• Born on January 15, 1924 in Boyhood ( South of America )
• 1948: finishes the Morehouse college
• 1951: he finishes his theology study
• 1953: marriages his wife; they get four children
• 1954: he moves to Atlanta to become preecher
• 1956: first bomb attack on King’s House
• 1957: King becomes leader of the “Southern Christian Leadership Conference”
• 1958: he publishes his first book "Stride Toward Freedom"
• 1959: he moves to India to appreciate Mahatma Gandhis engagement
for civil rights
• 1963: 250.000 people join Kings famous “March on Washington”;
King holds his famous “I have a dream speech”
• 1964: King is awarded with the Nobel prize for peace
• 1965: King and 3200 other people go from Selma to Montgomery
• 1968: King is shot on the balcony of his hotel by James Earl Gray

Walter Röhrich
2006-01-23, 22:28:47
3. Satz: ...of blacks and whites were forbidden.
4. Satz: ... non-violent protests...
5. Satz: ...got rid of race separation.
10. Satz: At this place he gave his famous "I have a dream" speech.
11. Satz: ...finally made it possible that everyone was allowed to vote.

Diese Fehler habe ich nach schnellem Durchlesen gefunden.

*DiVa*
2006-01-26, 09:46:34
wenn ich in englisch was besser wäre, würde ich dir gerne helfen ;)

P2oldi
2006-01-26, 09:56:42
1. Satz: wenn Du "benachteiligt" meinst mit "discrimintaged people" ists richtig. Willst Du explizit auf "diskriminierte Personen" hinweisen, müßte es "against discrimination of people" heissen.

8. Satz: civil rights movement
8. Satz: ein "o" zuviel in Montgomery

11. Satz: zwemal "finally" drin -> ...finally made it possible...

Biography:
1953: marries his wife, they have four children
1954: to become a preacher

das müßte es so eigentlich sein zusätzlich zu dem was mein Vorposter schon ergänzt hat.

Ladyzhave
2006-01-26, 14:35:22
ok, THanX, männer!

Killeralf
2006-01-26, 14:50:06
könntet ihr das nochmal durchgucken?
hab es mir eben nochmal durchgelesen und keine Fehler gefunden...

hier der Text:


Martin Luther King



• since 1950 there has been a movement against the oppression of discriminated people
• King’s engagement for the blacks began when he wanted to marry a white woman
• But in 30 of the 48 states of the USA marriages of blacks and whites were forbidden

• Martin Luther King was influenced by Mahatma Gandhis nonviolent protests
and decided to put in for the rights of blacks
• 1954 schools got rid of race seperation

• fight for equal rights went on:
• 1955 “Rosa Parks” refused to leave her seat in a bus for a white person
• King and other people of the civil right movement induced the “Montogomery Bus Boycott” which went on for a whole year ; others moved from city to city to
demonstrate against the race seperation
• Youths striked with “Sit-Ins” in schools
• March on Washington with 250.000 blacks symbolized the civil rights movement
Here he held his famous “I have a dream speech”
• March from Selma to Montgomery (“The bloody Sunday”) finally made it possible that everyone could vote



Biographie:
• Born on January 15, 1924 in Boyhood ( South of America )
• 1948: finishes the Morehouse college
• 1951: he finishes his theology study
• 1953: marriages his wife; they get four children
• 1954: he moves to Atlanta to become a preacher
• 1956: first bomb attack on King’s House
• 1957: King becomes leader of the “Southern Christian Leadership Conference”
• 1958: he publishes his first book "Stride Toward Freedom"
• 1959: he moves to India to appreciate Mahatma Gandhis engagement
for civil rights
• 1963: 250.000 people join Kings famous “March on Washington”;
King holds his famous “I have a dream speech”
• 1964: King is awarded with the Nobel prize for peace
• 1965: King and 3200 other people go from Selma to Montgomery
• 1968: King is shot on the balcony of his hotel by James Earl Gray

paar sachen sind mir noch aufgefallen..